Tassen Spellbinder

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I agree, this piece is quite good. I would recommend that everywhere in your poem a ... (ellipses, I believe they're called) appears, replace it/them with a comma. I find ...

Some things I saw that merit a bit of editing: "dawn will never com" come needs an e. "the diamond peek of wisdom" peak, not peek. "Down from the summits ...

Language warning, as usual. Those darn, foul-mouthed rebels... Part 1 can be found here: Part 2 can be found here: While Raz is gone, I contemplate the past uprisings and ...

Thanks input- the bit about distinguishing thoughts is greatly appreciated. As a side note, however, the main character is a he, not a she.

Part 2, comments would be greatly appreciated. Part 1 can be found here: ****** After a great deal of arguing between Asil and Raz, Enko makes an improvised splint for ...

I wont listen to Rap or Country, but I'm rather into rock, electronica, and lately, metal.

It's totally wrong for me... it said I was 100% female... wow...

I read Catch-22 for a class assignment, and hated it at first, convinced that Heller would be joining Gregory House as the only person/character on Earth more sarcastic than I, ...

Excellent work. I noticed a few things though, mostly nit-picky punctuation details. After waiting a few minutes to allow me to think, I gasped out,” What did you do to ...

Let me start by saying this was excellent, and a pleasure to read. Not being very good at the quote system, I'm just going to copy-paste the pertinent parts, and ...

Being borderline useless, I have no comments about the story itself, save for that I absolutely loved it, and can't wait for the next installment. What I would like to ...

I tend to agree with CondradRice, and would like to throw in a few other thoughts I had. First of all- I highly doubt your main character is the only ...

You simply must write more to this series. It would be a disservice to the world not to.

I can offer no suggestions, other than possibly make the last line part of the quatrain before it. That aside, this nearly brought tears to my eyes.